The grammar issues especially will just turn off so many readers that they won’t care how good the story is. (Part 1/2)anonymous readerReport 2013-05-30 19:38:00pplz my friend wants ppl to ask stuff or talk to her on ask.fm/akaErin ,,anonymous readerReport 2013-05-30 10:32:55Great stuff keep it up have him fuck her ass
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SMS«123» You asked for criticism, so I’m giving it to you. Video xxx Don’t take the lazy way out and just make excuses all the time. You may not be a professional author, as you said, but that is still no excuse to have such bad grammar. (Part 2/2)anonymous readerReport 2013-05-30 21:22:42I’m giving it a negative. Don’t take the lazy way out and just make excuses all the time. (Part 1/2)anonymous readerReport 2013-05-30 19:38:00pplz my friend wants ppl to ask stuff or talk to her on ask.fm/akaErin ,,anonymous readerReport 2013-05-30 10:32:55Great stuff keep it
