Your “Choppy” way of writing with short incomplete sentences is almost impossible for the reader to follow a coherent story line or thought process. Xxx hindi There was poor plot development and your use of colloquialisms and slang greatly detracted from your story development. I give this attempt a 1 out of 10.«12» Don’t give up, just get better. Your “Choppy” way of writing with short incomplete sentences is almost impossible for the reader to follow a coherent story line or thought process. Don’t give up, just get better. Your “Choppy” way of writing with short incomplete sentences is almost impossible for the reader to follow a coherent story line or thought process. at the beginningAnonymous readerReport 2010-06-17 08:45:45Guys l know why. … There was poor plot development and your use of colloquialisms and slang greatly detracted from your story development.
