5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2014-05-12 02:02:45Are you a native speaker of English? Bhabhi xxx great idea thouanonymous readerReport 2011-06-28 05:58:03ThereÂ’s a secert about your post. Whether you are or are not, you clearly need editorial help. The story is a good on, though, so keep writing.«1» Whether you are or are not, you clearly need editorial help. There are many spelling errors and the dialogue is rather stilted in several places. ICTYBTIHTKYanonymous readerReport 2011-06-18 12:29:27good story want moreanonymous readerReport 2011-06-11 09:52:43I gave the story a positive rating, but you sure could use a good editor. Please get some!anonymous readerReport 2013-07-19 08:37:42Reading your story is difficult please get an editor/ghost reader before posting to help you form sentences into paragraphs. The story is a good on, though, so keep writing.«1»
